I read through everything and had fun with it, but it kinda lost me halfway through. At some point the Mc and the ml didn’t make that much sense to me in terms of their actions/ feelings? The Mc was very clear on not wanting to sleep with the ml and disliking his attraction to him etc and then suddenly after fighting of the coyotes he’s asking the ml if he would sleep with him?
In the same way the change on the side of the ml doesn’t rlly make a lot of sense to me? Just because the Mc did not force himself on the ml (or tried to) he is now suddenly someone the ml feels comfortable with? Idk it just lost some incongruity imo, which made it less appealing.
I feel like the switch between the leads being strangers/not on good terms to them becoming lovers wasn’t that well executed. It felt like quite a sudden switch. The Mc should have needed way longer to develop feelings … considering how horrendous the ml was. Him being pretty really shouldn’t excuse that much. And the ml should have also needed way more reassurance/ time, with all of his trauma etc.
I would give it a 7/10 - comparable to a decent warm dish that you eat, when you’re hungry. It fill you up, does the job and tastes quite good in the beginning, but the more you eat the blander the taste gets.
I read through everything and had fun with it, but it kinda lost me halfway through. At some point the Mc and the ml didn’t make that much sense to me in terms of their actions/ feelings? The Mc was very clear on not wanting to sleep with the ml and disliking his attraction to him etc and then suddenly after fighting of the coyotes he’s asking the ml if he would sleep with him?
In the same way the change on the side of the ml doesn’t rlly make a lot of sense to me? Just because the Mc did not force himself on the ml (or tried to) he is now suddenly someone the ml feels comfortable with? Idk it just lost some incongruity imo, which made it less appealing.
I feel like the switch between the leads being strangers/not on good terms to them becoming lovers wasn’t that well executed. It felt like quite a sudden switch. The Mc should have needed way longer to develop feelings … considering how horrendous the ml was. Him being pretty really shouldn’t excuse that much. And the ml should have also needed way more reassurance/ time, with all of his trauma etc.
I would give it a 7/10 - comparable to a decent warm dish that you eat, when you’re hungry. It fill you up, does the job and tastes quite good in the beginning, but the more you eat the blander the taste gets.