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The pacing is pacing. What is this? If the author wanna make PWP (Porn Without Plot) they should just do that, one shots are literally fine. If they wanna make a porn with plot or an actual story, they should make characters we care about and pace this thing much slower because it’s moving in break neck speed rn and I don’t care about these characters AT ALL.
The plot isn’t plotting and because of it the porn isn’t porning, just remove the plot and make fetish content, or just remove some of the sex scene and flesh the plot more. Don’t do it so half assed man.
Honestly the story isn’t that bad, kinda fast redemption for Cal tho but he got redeemed-ish nonetheless. It’s good and fun enough but it’s pretty ordinary all things considered. It’s kind of like a 7 story wise, not too bad but nothing to write home about.
But for those who get super easily triggered by grape and the very bad power imbalance tho, I warn ya this might not be for you. They did redeem him but imo it’s a tiny bit sloppy.