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I adore the MC & ML & the plot is good for the most part but it lacks cohesion & feels random at times.
The MC invests in a scheme a friend recommends, to make money using his own savings but then owes money to loan sharks- why? It’s implied that his friend who recommended the money making scheme took out the loan & put the MC’s name on it as a cosigner without the MC’s knowledge but how is that even a thing??
The MC & ML were good friends in high school but the MC just randomly totally forgets about the ML & no longer recognizes him? The ML recognizes the MC but never says anything- why?
The MC decides to become a gangster to work off this random loan & find the guy who scammed him. He gets a job working for the loan sharks & the ML is the boss. The whole working to pay off the loan situation is vague.
The MC was in his second year of law school on a scholarship when this all happened. It’s unclear if he dropped out or is taking a break.
I get that authors will do this & wrap things up throughout the storyline but these things all just feel random to me.
Overall I like it but feel like it cld be so much better.
The first part is somehow pretty fucking common in debt manhwa (much to my dismay), I've seen ones where they just take their thumb print while the person is asleep, or steal their stamp or just plain forge their signatures. The loan was taken by the friend from a shady af loan shark so ig it makes sense that they wouldn't really care whether the signature is forged or not or who pays back the debt or not, as long as they get the money all should be good. So yeah a very common plot.
The reason why the mc doesn't remember shit? Who knows? Maybe he had a head injury in the past. Or maybe he just couldn't be bothered to remember some friend he made in high school for a couple of months after his life went to shit (his grandma getting sick and dying, getting into law college on a scholarship, getting into a debt). It's probably an amnesia subplot tho.
As for why the ml doesn't tell him? Idk tbh. Maybe he sees no reason to. Like I said it was a few months at best that they spent with each other. Maybe the ml assumed the mc didn't care much about those memories and so he forgot. Maybe that's why he isn't saying anything first. Or maybe he just doesn't want to involve mc in his life considering how tangled up he is in the mob world.
I don't really remember cus it's been a while but I always thought that the mc stopped taking payments from the mc cus obv he wouldn't want mc to live a debt ridden life. That and the fact that both of them are actively searching for the friend so he can pay it back himself. At most the ml could just dock a little bit of mc's pay for a pretense, like look I'm still taking monthly payments from you.
I think he said he dropped out? He was planning to join a gang and we've seen how he was all gung ho about doing anything to get his revenge. I mean a law student wouldn't really go around cutting off fingers lol.
Tho ngl I also feel that the plot is really random at times but I find the non spontaneity a bit fun lol
Also I'm not really arguing here (also I just use curse words so often I naturally used it in the comment, didn't really mean to be rude! Sorry if my tone comes off that way)
Couldn't have said it better if I tried honestly
I really hope it’s not a TBI and/or amnesia subplot- i avoid those.
I appreciate the insight & perspective. I’m neurodivergent so being confused or not understanding makes me so frustrated. I do get overally invested in the story- not gonna lie.
Ugh, i find it tedious & I love a slow burn but this is painfully slow. I skipped ahead- it cldnt keep my toddler level attention span. Am I still gonna read it- of course, now I’m vested & i need to know what happens.