How do you write this much
Because a decade+ of schooling has taught me that literary analysis and creative writing are both fun and useful skills to have.
Im impressed (=・ω・=)
Thank you. ヾ(❀╹◡╹)ﾉ~
fellow constructive yapper...
fair points tho.
sadly, the second point is a common thing that popped up in ropan releases after 2022, even considering the sources of some adaptations.
probably bandwagoning imo.
this one has an FMC with an alright attitude tho. too much insufferable protags in other manhwas recently TT
Couldn't agree more with you.
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It's got some problems, but overall I like it. I'm presently on chapter 40 and I think I have 2 main issues.
One - They're falling for each other real fast with so few conversations between them. And I know that might not be a huge issue for people. It's not a "make or break" issue for me either when I take in the context of their individual circumstances. "He's the only one who showed her kindness/didn't believe the rumors about her." And for him, he saw her past and can genuinely see that she's got more going on than just the rumors say. But those kinds of things also leave a lot up to speculation and lead to the creation of an idealised version of somebody if you don't ACTUALLY take the time to get to know them. Not to mention on her side he actually WASN'T the only one who showed her any kindness because she had a designated saviour. (And yes, I understand Raymond was actually an asshole and he wasn't really a saviour, but SHE didn't know that all the way up until he killed her.) Realistically it makes more sense for her to have fallen in love with Raymond.
This brings me to my second point in that it sort of seems made up as we go along at times. An example being that in an earlier chapter she's speculating about whether or not Corelia could have been working for somebody. And the way it's written makes it sound like she's coming to that conclusion for the first time, or that she came to that conclusion after a long time of thinking about it later. But in chapter 40 she implies that not only did she know about it, but Ferdin knew about it and had a fairly active investigation looking into it even if it didn't land him with any answers. This also shouldn't be a translation error either since I am reading the officials. There are more instances of tiny mismatches like this, but frankly I'm too lazy to go scouting for other problems and "why bother?"
Other than that my issues are fairly minor. Pacing is a bit off. And while I side-eye Charon not knowing, I'm willing to overlook it considering he was young and abuse victims frequently feel like they can't talk about it. That dad though? HEAVY SIDE-EYE. Ain't no way he hasn't seen his daughter being blamed for everything from a stained dress to fucking manslaughter and he's nowhere to be seen? The fuq. (╯°Д °)╯╧╧