I'm only good at grammar corrections but I'll try
1. comma after miserable instead of a period
2. Instead of as maybe use when, since we're in past tense
3. It depends on what you're trying to go for, like maybe a mystery, but could you explain why they did what they did to "fix" her?
4. The alien technology is a bit sudden, maybe explain more on ...... reply
genuine question ive already asked before but nobody responded
does anybody remember when u could like edit ur location when ur first signing up
so like I did that and I was like "ahahaha ill set my location to mars" and then suddenly I saw a bunch of people with mars as a set location and then I saw mangago had it too today so like I am asking again did I cause this or
im asking because when im in the forums I see a lot of ppl defending themself by saying they read for plot so like whats ur guys' opinion on fujoshis who purposely read smut yaoi
yk when ur reading a bl and then it gets to a scene where the 2 MC's are doing something and then a fujoshi sees and they basically freak out over the 2 MC's relationship
i remember when i was signing up n stuff there was an option to customize ur location and I was like haha ill do mars and then just recently I see a bunch of people with their location set as mars uh