I think the poem is good but it could be better like i love the central idea of this poem, I could feel you trying to express how someone continues to live through you. Its intimate and bittersweet.
But it needs some polishing like It needs some editing for rhythm and clarity, but don't over-polish it.
Some phrasing feels awkward for example, "tr...... reply
Everyone and their moms are buying me in tiktok istg every new day im following some random tiktoker whom I have never ever seen before in my life like what is this truly?? Are they actually my account as their follower or is my tiktok account hacked?? Have yall experienced this or is it js me?
SSKKSKSKSKSKSKSK AND I OOP AND I OOP AND I OOP SJSKSKKSKSKSK WHO WANTS TO JOIN ZSCO #ZSCO #SAVEZOMBIES #ZOMBIESLIVESMATTER #SKSKSKSKKSKS #ANDIOOPANDIOOP those who hates zombies can suck their own dirty poopy toes
did eat while reading
did eat while reading
want to do read manga
