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I still love this story! Lyle's so cute and everything before the "break up" and after the reconciliation is so freaking great!
But damn I still hate the misunderstanding and especially how Ash just doesn't take much accountability for what he said to Lyle on that day and had the audacity to get mad when he literally had just called their relationship nothing to Lyle's face, even if he didn't realize his own feelings for Lyle at the time...
... I always try to excuse it by thinking that Lyle probably looks a lot more poker faced than how the artist drew it through the whole series, so that Ash legit didn't know Lyle's feelings but anyone with eyes could see that Lyle was hurt when he said that...
And I know that it's kinda the point that we're also supposed to see that Ash is actually really flawed and almost as emotionally stunted as Lyle but hides it better...
But man I just hate how Ash almost excuses his own actions and what he said by blaming it on Lyle's inability to express himself...
To me some of Ash's actions just don't seem very sincere when trying to get Lyle back and that it's a lot more about his own feelings than Lyle's feeling's... To me that's the only flaw in this story... Otherwise a freaking masterpiece
he never put the blame on him though? he always figured out where he himself was wrong before moving on to how lyle was dealing the situation because he's also shown human and has stunted communication almost as much as lyle, unlike lyle who usually doesn't like to communicate much, ash pushes him out of thay zone because its not one sidedly up to him to consistently be understanding of a person who doesn't express themselves, he was very human, same with lyle. both their faults were equally recognised, esp by Ash.
So was I put off by the smut? No, I have read equally weird stuff... But there's just something about this that doesn't work?
Like I love a good corruption story... But then you have to commit to it just being smut and nothing else, but the fact that this tried to pretend to have plot, ruined it for me.
And what really pissed me off was that it used one of my least favorite tropes to justify him being abandoned as well.
Some people would probably say that this is the whole point of the corruption tag and yes technically on paper it is exactly that ... But there's just some things in the story that makes the corruption itself unbelievable to me...like I don't buy it...
And don't get me started on the second hand where he's already corrupted... The fucking tone shift is god awful! Like decide what genre you wanna write???????
So yes I fucking hated it despite it having awesome smut
Also side note... You could also write a longer and more serious corruption story with more fleshed out characters as well and actually commit. I think that could have worked as well . Instead of this half assed plot in between smut.
Sorry accidentally downveted