beta
I don't know if it's just me but everything seems so fast but not well written. I'm on chapter 16 and the main characters are already dating. We have the mc blushing when he met the ml, the ml thinking that mc is cute, then he rushes mc to the hospital where mc starts to think about his situation and seizes. The elements of a story is present but it's execution is just... Bad? I remember liking the beginning of the story but at some point in the middle I feel like the author didn't care anymore and just wanted to write the smut so they skipped writing the characters having actual chemistry. Right now I feel nothing. I get that they are physically attracted to each other but I don't see any qualities of them being in love (granted it's pretty early in the story still). The mc is kind of all over the place too. One moment he's serious and anxious about being in a novel, the next moment he's thinking about getting fucked by the ml and acting flustered. He thinks the ml will hit him sometimes due to past abuse, then he next he's completely fine. We're given some flashback implying that they knew each other, but it still doesn't erase the fact that they literally don't have chemistry. This isn't good writing.