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Kuno Shio, who is half human and half alien, has a "glitch" that causes his body to turn into a gel-...

The main character has the ability to read other people’s thoughts and feelings as written tex...

This is decent, it just has a few things that irk me.

The primary annoyance for me is the fact that MC being colorblind and ML being scentblind is poorly utilized. It comes up so very rarely I forget it's even an aspect of the story. This could have given much more content to the plot if utilized properly. The fact they both needed to struggle in their fields would be great bonding fodder. Instead it's used in a minor conversation and never brought up again.

This would be the same story without them being color/scentblind.

On a dark and snowy night, Sho-an drags home what he believes to be the corpse of a beautiful man. B...

Arata's a college student working as a "big brother for rent." One day, he meets his ...

This is good yet felt unsatisfying at the same time. Art is good, plot is nice and characters are interesting. However... it has a heavy tone that it doesn't quite deliver on. It feels like it should have been quite a bit longer.

It has topics such as death, rape, abuse, neglect and more yet they are handled so lightly. They will be touched on, the depth occasionally acknowledged, and then moved on from instantly. This feels unfufilling.

There are also a number of things that feel as if they've been left unanswered, but in a way it felt like they were forgotten about.

Basically- it feels like a full length novel was condensed into a short story. Enjoyable but like something is missing.

This feels like a writer had a bunch of scenes in mind and forcibly tied them together. It's less about a plot/story and more about "exciting" scenes playing out. It would be fine if it didn't present itself as a deeper story. The amount of inner dialogue makes it appear as of the author wanted this to have feelings attached, but that is all thrown out by how the characters interact.

I mean.... really? The trope that gets this rolling is a "straight" guy going to "teach" his gay friend how to have sex? What? That doesn't even make pretend sense. That's like saying I'll teach someone how to be vegan by feeding them meat. It makes no sense.

In a world where the Han Empire never fell, martial arts is a power used to squeeze the people dry. ...

This strikes me as a writer who had a bunch of scenes in mind but didn't consider how to make them cohesive. Everything is very fast paced and jarring. You don't have a chance to connect to any of the characters before a new one is introduced... and then another. :S Everything that happened within 15 chapters could have made for a compelling story if it had been spread out to maybe 50 or so. This would have given time for things to build and for us to get an idea/opinion on characters.

But no. It goes from "thoughtful guy who gave space to uncle/nephew" to a sudden "yelling and accusing partner, most likely hot headed."

Then "infatuated because uncle has a nice body" to suddenly "protective, standing up for uncle, borderline lovesick behavior, annnd acting like he knows everyone involved and calling out others faults."

Oh and "friend with unrequited love for years who always acted like a stable rock and source of advice" to "yelling at uncle, looking at him like he's a whore and passing instant judgments."

Like, how much of a yoyo can these characters be? The writer clearly had an idea about the characters when coming up with the story... only to not share any of it with us.

It changed so much that I thought I missed a 5 year timeskip or something. Characters look older, and have lost facial range. Expressions feel very cookie cutter, whereas in season 1 they had feeling put into it. I tried to keep going... but I feel a strong disconnect now.

It's not that the art is "bad" it's just very different from season 1. So much so that it gives the story a different vibe. If it started out with this art I don't think it'd feel so jarring. But the change totally switched up the reading expierence for me. I feel less connected to the characters, their emotions and the plot overall. It just strikes me as a bit hollow and unfinished.

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From Good Girls Scans BL:“Shall we get married?” — A fake marriage between two men...

This makes me think of a first time author who jotted down a bunch of ideas and was determined to fit all of them in. It leads to fast pacing, overused cliches and awkward characters. It feels like it wasn't well thought out, and instead has been rushed to completion. Just another MC who activley works towards changing a plot only to... be suprised/worried the plot is changing

I can already see the checklist
-cold ML who falls for FL instantly, despite notoriously not liking women
-cold ML who is only warm to FL (for some reason this is supposed to show how special FL is, instead of the reality ML is self centered)
-ML is so crazy for FL he is obsessive/possesive, (cuz apparently that's supposed to be "sweet")
-contract relationship with time limit (that will constantly be mentioned)
-FL takes over evil woman, begins acting nice
-abused child who is suddenly treated well (since trauma is apparently easily fixed with a smile)
-Prince who likes/needs FL (because we need royal drama)
-magic that is unique to FL (need some excuse for her to be relevant, after all)
-FL starts to fall for ML, but thinks he doesn't like her (again, need drama)
-ML likes FL but won't just say it until much later (I guess honesty is less entertaining than season long miscommunication/misunderstandings)

Art is pretty tho. Gotta at least give em that.

From Lezhin:<br >After ending an on-again, off-again relationship of 10 years, Minsuk decides ...

Cute art and characters, that's for sure!

However... I wish it wasn't so short. It really left me feeling like this was an unfinished draft that was changed into a short story. No character development, no real info on the characters in general- just short fluff. I can tell the writer put thought into it from the author's note... so it would have been nice to see that realized.

As pretty and cute as it was, I felt rather meh about it. MC felt very childish and only gets his way through his tears. He comes across as a total child. I understand that ML finds that "endearing" but as a reader it feels kinda off putting. All I can think of MC as is a manchild who would need ML to play the mommy role. It just reminds me of all the women complaining that their men expect them to do everyyyything to the point of feeling like a mom. xD

I wish this was at least 20 chapters and that they touched on A) MC taking care of himself like an adult B) brief explanation of imprinting, or hinting that they imprinted C) ML voicing his thoughts D) MC doing something to show ML he cares for him beyond just crying.

Why did it have to go the full blow rape with a bleeding arsehole route?! "We love you, so let us get you drunk and then use you like an object with no care for your wellbeing," is such an unneeded aspect to add into this. Why throw in the whole "love" word when they are more focused on their own physical pleasure than his? It would have been perfectly fine if they went the drunken "mistake" route where they coerced him into it type of noncon. But nopppppe. They go the rape with no regard for his body's health route. A torn anus and undoubted hemmroids for the poor Uke in this one. :(

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Renta: Yutaro Tsutsumi has got no job, no home, and no girlfriend, and he blames it all on his evil-...

Zhi Banyi has a secret. His heart only beats faster when he listens to a streamer called "Dust ...

It's decent in terms of the outcome.... but the execution of it all is really sloppy.

It feels rushed and like she simply stumbled into it. If it was that easy to get rid of him, then why did it take soooo darn long? She didn't succeed through a smart plan: things went wrong yet magically fell into place. Feels really hollow to me.

I get that this was a smut first and plot comes second, if that, kind of story but... building so much dislike around a character for such an u rewarding send off is pretty disappointing. Feels like the author got tired and decided to wrap things up as quick as possible.