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ONLY IN FICTION, I won't have too much of an issue with these types of themes, so that is not why I didn't enjoy this read. It was poorly constructed, and quite literally tried to throw and combine all problematic scenarios in a span of 6 chapters.
It was a waste of time and unfortunately I'm those that if it's short, once I start reading I must finish, so overall this gets a ZERO rating from me.
I wanted to drop this around the time Jack saved her and she was hella rude about the whole thing, so in the very beginning. But I was like no it's too soon, give it a chance, then I was too far in to just end it especially when I'm the type of person who finishes what I start reading even if it gets boring. I thought, it was a short 58 chapters, though not sure if that really was the end because it says "to be continued", so just push through it and get it over with it.
The seriousness of the concepts would of been alright but it wasn't executed well.
Sadly it all just feels very childish, actually all the characters, especially the "adults", designs look child like in their sizes. There was constant errors in characters design, especially Squall's missing arm, some panels in the present time he has both arms, like during the towns play, but in his past as a child he doesn't have one arm though there's a part in the story his first time on how he had met Margaret playing the piano he had both arms.
It all just felt jumbled and especially rushed, also Margaret was very selfish, incompetent, and ungrateful in the beginning with Jack right after he had saved her. As well as how she reacted and treated the villagers in the beginning. Like yes, her past as Margaret she was sheltered, and struggled with her condition, which doesn't come up again or explained what exactly was the cause, but she was bold enough to form a relationship with Squall, though betrayed, her character should of been more intelligent on maneuvering her emotions and actions as Mag.
Squall's story about how he was tricked and used by his father had so much potential if only it had better filler, though I did enjoy that bit because it did make me feel bad for him. And I would liked to of seen more interaction with Lady Leona, I really like her.
As for Jack's past was interesting, tried to get revenge, riddled with guilt and sadly blackmailed, a child forced to make that poison, so when he told Mag about what happened her reaction pissed me off and enhanced more how naive she was as Margaret to not understand that a child had no choice but to accept an order from a noble or die. Like girl be so for real.
The things I had liked was Jack's mom, her story though shortly portrait was my favorite. She was an actual witch and the glimpse of her love for Jack's father and sadly how he died and accepted it after the mom told him and gave him the time frame of when he'd pass. She had told him it would been better if he hadn't known when but the he answered with the perfect line of, "It gave me chance to say proper goodbye".
Anyway the battle scene at the end was so rushed and the designs messed up again on showing scars on people's faces then they disappeared. The whole scene of Mag running away leaving behind Jack, him fighting the people who had kidnapped them, and then her turning back seeing him it looked like she didn't get far at all. Then to jump in water to save Jack the cliff was not that far from the water looked like a ledge instead, out of nowhere the kidnappers had arrows. Then Squall with the north soilders found them somehow then saved them. The confession was not it, felt lame, rushed and just an after thought.
The ending felt rushed, annoying, and very childish but I guess when you aren't sure on how to wrap everything up you just through all the ideas in and hope that satisfies.