beta
The idea is cool and I like the character dynamic but the writing is so bad I keep laughing at everything, it just looks so absurd "I want to cherish him" (proceeds to throw himself at him without consent)
Also the way the tops acting like they've been married for 10 years (with how dramatic he is) when it's only a few chapters THE WAY HE WAS HOLDING OUT HIS HAND WHEN HE HAD THIS WHOLE INSIDE MONOLOGUE, SO AWKWARD LOL
It's like someone was forced to write this