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This was good, but you can tell they just rushed the ending. I love the couple and how MC is strong and extremely smart, and his light doesn't diminish just because he is in love (like other BLs do to MCs). I hate how everyone got a happy ending except for Varabus, his arch ends so abruptly.
I understand Varabus is supposed to be the villian (and supposedly tries to rape MC in the a possible future), but I felt like that was extremely out of character. Varabus definitely took advantage, but there wasn't much he could do with his lack of power compared to ML, and he kept MC safe all those years from being killed by the king even if it came at a cost. And now Varabus has to be unhappy and marry some random noble lady, everyone else got redemption, why couldn't he?
Also the weird turn with the orphanage's director, like why? It just made the MC look like a asshole even if it was his money. It would be one thing if the director got rich was pocketing the money for luxuries, but he instead used all the money to provide for the children that nobody else was doing (as we see that nobody cares about commoner children). Like the MC said the director wanted to look like a saint, but its not like it stopped the orphanage from shutting down, he didn't get any fame, literally no one knows him outside that small ass village. So I felt like the director's punishment to be a old man panhandling was too cruel.
Speaking of orphans, what happened to the counts son the MC and ML promised to raise? He got the permission for the royal library and then left with the ML. Kind of rude.
Speaking of the ML's empire, what happen to the betrayers? They just gloss over that after the ML talks to the emperor, even his bloodline being forcibly injected with dragon blood was glossed over.
Cute story, mostly okay pacing, probably won't reread. Especially when a big plot point was sex and then they show 1/4 chapter of it towards the end. Also they never explain why certain people have in their DNA the ability to tolerate dragon's blood. I thought they would dive into it that actually most of the spouses originate from that village because the dragon herb is actually used in the food, building tolerance for generations or something.
You know what I actually agree about Varabus. I guess it's a morally grey area. I actually wanted to see the king get his lashings... he's litt the one who wanted to hurt MC. Of course Varabus played a part but the king litt wanted to kill MC. Just felt a lot was rushed, you can sense the author had plans for more but decided to wrap it up lol
I definitely agree with the points about it being rushed. Varabus’ look of shock when the giant elemental was attacking the castle attempting to frame the Eastern kingdom made it seem like we’d be interested to more villains to be apprehended.
However, I very much disagree with your first two paragraphs. Did you forget that Varabus attempted to rape and hold Ennid permanently hostage? And that nothing about the pressure from his family required him to be cruel to Ennid all throughout school? Redemption was definitely a possible story arc but imo not a necessary one.
Also I’m fairly certain the count just asked Ennid to be legally listed as the illegitimate child’s legal guardian in title alone, not to actually raise them. I think the count intended to raise the child himself regardless but wanted someone respectable listed as the child’s guardian for the sake of standing. I guess the reasoning would be that the count didn’t want his own guardianship to highlight the child’s illegitimacy, and the original choice of the orphanage director due to his wrongdoings would look bad for the child.
Finally, the orphanage director still robbed Ennid blind. Imagine if you found out the only parental figure to ever exist in your life as far as you can remember lied to your face the entire time, and didn’t ask your permission a single time before making sure that you lived a life of misery that your dying parents (who already donated a lot of their money to the orphanage) worked their lives to prevent, keeping you from ever even knowing anything about your parents since that would expose him. He got what he deserved.
Despite the high rating, this is quite mediocre. The chemistry between Mason and Noah isn't really there, Noah is just obsessed with Mason and Mason is just going along the ride. Mason still viewed Noah as a child most of the time, I believe the only reason he even developed feelings was because he is in Haley body (explaining the wet dreams and thinking about him a lot). Especially when Mason was a straight man until Haley's body basically "craves" the male touch.
Also speaking of Haley, he gets no justice and no happy ending. Haley was manipulated since he was a child, drug addicted, sex addicted, and needed psychological help. Clearly he still had a heart since he was sending money to all his relatives and he didn't have the strength to fight back, with barely his manager by his side that wasn't the best role model or try to help him grow. Constantly taking advantage to the point of being so desperate for love that he spent 30k using his life to save Noah's life. I honestly wished he somehow switched into Mason's body, it healed (like switch body magic automatically healed him) and he started a new life because of confusion and became happy.
Instead Haley's body is being used and Noah is constantly talking about how "slutty" his body is and degrading him. When Haley's body reactions is the only reason theyre together. Idk, everything just gave me a big ick. I guess I'm glad Noah and Mason gets a happy ending, but Haley deserves justice and love too.