here is a link to some sketches and art I did of Juda and Daato's lovemaking. I hope you like them a tiny bit.
http://www.mangago.me/home/album/54027/
Here is a link to some drawings of mine of Daato and Juda making love.
http://www.mangago.me/home/photo/2987451/#image
sorry, this is the proper link:
http://www.mangago.me/home/album/54027/
I saw your webtoon, nice drawing.
here is a link to some sketches I made of Juda and Daath/o lovemaking and some pics of them. http://www.mangago.me/home/photo/2987451/#image
I put more remnant art in my Remnant Kemonhito Raindragon's art album. Thanks for looking at my stuff, you guys.
http://www.mangago.me/home/photo/2987451/#image
Now I have annoying things to say. sorry in advance...... I like Daath/Daato so much, but I hate the huge change Hasumi has morphed onto him.
I don't know how Julio even recognizes Daath. He looks at least ten years older than when he and Julio were together, and while Julio still has the same cute looks he did back then, Daath looks about 30.
Daath doesn't even have the same name he did back then. LOL JK about the name!
In this and the next few chapters, Daato is just one big Fashion-don't.
If that ugly haircut doesn't ruin Daato's appearance, that outfit does. That went-out-with-the-sixties bib collar is a sure-fire way to AGE a person, which contributes to the complete anachronism that Daato/Daath has become. With him looking so much older now, the cute dynamic between he and Juda has fallen flat.
Daato does have some pretty looks in this chapter, but just wait for ch11-13
Back to the outfit. I guess Hasumi doesn't sew. You don't take a piece of fabric and drape it any old way to make that collar. It looks a mess. You don't sew it onto a black chord, and you sure as hell don't put a necklace over it. In RL that get-up would get snickered at. Worse, it makes Daato look anorexically thin, which all of his clothing does from now through chapter 13.
Annoying: Why is Juda pulling out? There's absolutely no reason for him to do that. Second, Daato forced him to give up on something. What? Be clear, dammit. Third, Daato hasn't told Juda about his infertility, but everyone else in the household knows about it? Good lord. Fourth, man, I'm so sick of reading graphic sex scenes where no one enjoys themselves. shit.
Fifth, Daato fears himself for still for having "that thought." For god's sake, what thought, and what about having that thought makes him afraid of himself? yeah, I can figure it out if I TRY, but I shouldn't have to. That's not my job as a reader, and it's annoying.
Waiting for what words from Juda? Sure, I can figure it out, but on first read it was like, Huh? Again, not my job.
OMG, if Daath doesn't say no he's afraid he'll say "something else." WTF!!! This one really is too cryptic to get unless I speculate. Speculating is not my job. The answer should be there, clearly stated, in the narrative.
"I wonder which is worse" is a statement, not a question. Get your grammar together. "To do otherwise would be to dishonor Sensei." Bahahahaha!
There's one lovely hint that Daath is already pregnant. Does anyone else agree that "it's already so humid" points at the twins?
I still like this. I'm just not enjoying it anywhere near as much as I did, and I'm pissed as hell with Hasumi for changing Daath into a different character than he started out as.
the narrative ridiculously contradicts itself. It's impossible to match up the words with the pictures. Clearly, the sex scene was very long, almost all night, and there had to have been periods of time when Kurama relaxed, felt passion and lust toward Kirishima. How do we know this? Because Kurama states that he came several times. It's not possible for a man to come three or more times during a brief, brutal rape. If we're to believe that the narrative is all there, that nothing is missing or lost in translation, then all the characters must be mutant aliens from another world. There needs to be moments during their sex that hint at Kurama feeling good at least ONCE. Jesus, otherwise the scene is a total loss. The way it reads now, that's how it is: a total loss. I just don't believe that's what the author intended.
What author in all of yaoidom takes the trouble of making anatomical drawings of the prostate being stimulated and the uke reacting to it with this internal dialogue being, "all I feel is fear and insanity." Bullshit. NO WAY. His body convulses. In yaoi, that reaction is sexual bliss. Next, his eyes roll up in his head. Am I supposed to believe that that is not a mind-blowing orgasm? According to these stupid words, it's a reaction of agony and going nuts from fear. Fuck that. It's not what's being shown.
Where is the expression of Kurama feeling what the words say he felt? This scene that seemed like wham bam rape, doesn't fit with the words spoken and unspoken. Something is off. This scene being perceived the way people are saying they perceive it is not what the author wanted in my opinion.
The story is crafted well enough that it's clear that an idiot didn't write it, but the way it reads, an idiot would have had to have written it.
Kurama didn't hate the kisses, and the picture where Kirishima fingers him is supposed to be sexy, not horrible. Why else would the artist take the trouble to draw it so well?
Kirishima wasn't using as much force as the dialogue and narrative says he is. He had time to get out the vaseline and prepare Kurama. You can't do that with a victim who is wriggling around, trying to get away while being forced against his will in every possible way. Something is missing, and it's annoying because this scene didn't have to be as terrible, violent, and torturous as the words would have us believe.
Kurama's reaction to being penetrated is the shock of someone realizing they've now past the point of no return. With his family, that moment would be devastating, but it would not be without the thrill of getting fucked by your fantasy partner of many years. The feelings portrayed are confusion, fear, passion, panic, and arousal all blended together. That's the reaction I see. I don't see, "Ouch ouch ouch, trying to get away." I see someone reeling because they're world is being rocked to the core.
Could it have been a dry orgasm? Also, even if it lasted a while (which i don't think it did? Time passed between the rape and morning), i don't see how that indicates that he felt pleasure? Is it only rape up till a certain amount of time? You seem to be making the argument that because the scene might have lasted awhile that it contradicts with him not wanting it, but i don't see how. There was no break time shown, there was no pleasure shown, so i'm not sure where you got that idea from. To be clear, he felt pleasure physically, but he stated before the seme raped him that he no longer wanted to have sex with the seme and called him a rapist after so we can see he didn't want it. That along with saying no and stop the way he did, it didn't look like moans.
I'll cite pages.
1. Kirishima spent the rest of the night crying when the Kurama rejected him and called him a rapist. I.E. time passed: http://www.mangago.me/read-manga/renai_fuyuki_todoki/nmt/6fe00c70e017ea3415353c4bd13d049b_chapter-3/pg-38/
2. Kurama said at the bottom of the page that he no longer wants to sleep with Kirishima because Kirishima has feelings for him and he wants a no-strings-attached hookup as he can't see a future with another man because of his dad: http://www.mangago.me/read-manga/renai_fuyuki_todoki/nmt/6fe00c70e017ea3415353c4bd13d049b_chapter-3/pg-20/
You said the fingering is supposed to be sexy, not horrible, here is why that's not quite right. Yes, he'd always wanted Kirishima and was struggling with this throughout the rape scene as he experienced all the things he'd wanted to experience with Kirishima, but not in the good way he'd always envisioned way as he says later on pg 34 that "what Kirishima gave me is fear" and "my first time having sex was completely different from what i had imagined all this time"):
1. On page 20 (cited above), if you read through you'll notice that Kirishima got pissed off because the Kurama was looking to throw his virginity away (look at his face), then...
2. On page 21 you see him, in his anger, forcibly hold the Kurama down and drag him up the bed (it says "drag, drag, drag") while ignoring his protests: http://www.mangago.me/read-manga/renai_fuyuki_todoki/nmt/6fe00c70e017ea3415353c4bd13d049b_chapter-3/pg-21/
3. Here you see Kirishima literally say "i don't think i'll be able to do it softly, but isn't that exciting?" before he just puts spit on his fingers and immediately puts, not one, but two fingers straight into Kurama's DRY virgin asshole. Kurama says "ow" and you see Kirishima start to mercilessly thrust his fingers in and out as it says "thrust, thrust, thrust": http://www.mangago.me/read-manga/renai_fuyuki_todoki/nmt/6fe00c70e017ea3415353c4bd13d049b_chapter-3/pg-24/
4. The scene continues here with Kurama saying "no... Ah, that hurts" and "it hurts", the only time where he really feels good is when Kirishima hits his prostate, then he moans, the rest is pain: http://www.mangago.me/read-manga/renai_fuyuki_todoki/nmt/6fe00c70e017ea3415353c4bd13d049b_chapter-3/pg-25/
See? The fingering was painful for him because, as Kirishima admitted himself, he wasn't doing it softly. He only used spit as lube, Kurama's asshole was dry when he first started fingering him, he only licks Kurama's asshole after stretching him out and before using the lube. He immediately used 2 fingers on a dry, tight asshole and rather than do it slowly he immediately thrust them in and out vigorously. It's actually better to thrust them in and out vigorously, IF the asshole is wet and slick, spitting on his fingers and going into a dry ass creates SO much friction. You only thrust vigorously like that if the hole is wet and slick. It's probably BECAUSE of the suddenness and the pain that Kurama wasn't able to leave before Kirishima entered him on page 28. You can see that Kurama was a mess from all the physical stimulation. Presumably the lube was nearby as in one panel it shows Kirishima holding his dick standing above Kurama's asshole and the next Kirishima is on the bed getting ready to put his dick in with the lube down between his legs. There isn't anything indicating that the scene took that long.
As a final note, this page alone should show that the sex wasn't wanted, he was scared of the seme and batted his hand away. Did you see his facial expression and shaking too?: http://www.mangago.me/read-manga/renai_fuyuki_todoki/nmt/6fe00c70e017ea3415353c4bd13d049b_chapter-3/pg-33/
The rape felt good as he struggled between the reality and what he had always envisioned his 1st time with Kirishima would be like before he left feeling scared and hurt.
You wasted your tendons typing all this out. A rape occurred. I've already acknowledged that, youraed.
No break time was shown, but it was in the dialogue, which is why I said that the words and pictures don't match.
Saying Kurama had three or more dry orgasms during a brief, brutal rape is as ridiculous as saying he had three normal orgasms.
The author has gone to excessive trouble establishing Kurama's reasons for having severely mixed emotions regarding his homosexuality. That was done so we would know that not everything Kurama is going through is all about Kirishima. The father is a crucial element in this story. I can't even begin to imagine how someone in Kurama's position could cope with all he was going through.
Another thing, which has nothing to do with your comment. Kirishima is being accused of raping a woman. That didn't happen. There wasn't enough time.
The author needed a device that would show how disappointed and confused Kurama was by Kirishima's heterosexuality, and that it was right in Kurama's face at the worst possible moment. That's why there was a scratch. It was a visual signal that would allow Kurama to ask about it. It's not there so Kirishima can be irrevocably condemned. If it was, he wouldn't be appearing again in this manga as a lead character in a love story. Surely we can all see that, right?
The author went to considerable trouble establishing these things the same way she set up every other saving grace in the story. The problem is that it isn't in the words. As I've said before, something is off.
Honestly, i'm questioning you saying "it can't be done" as the premise of your entire argument as well. **trigger warning, i'm going to get a little explicit about my personal experience** I mean, i can say as i guy that i can cum at least twice in one jerk session. If i can make myself go twice, i don't see why someone i was into couldn't get me to go thrice while touching my prostate. It's harder to get to that point by myself, but i have orgasmed 3 times in one jerk before, the first time was normal, the 2nd not very much came out and the 3rd was a dry heave. Also, whether or not it was rape wasn't all i talked about, i also talked about the fingering and how you think it should be considered "sexy, not horrible".
Also, i discussed whether or not it was rape because you kept implying Kurama wanted it, referencing the possible amount of time the scene took place. You say there must've been breaks and he must've felt pleasure to cum multiple times. You sound contradictory since you acknowledge it as rape and make that argument. You also went on to argue that people are "misreading the scene" as "it's supposed to be sexy, not horrible". It sounds like you're trying to leave a subliminal message. Now do you see why i made it clear it was rape?
you're a guy? Really? Youraed's a man? Wow. Paradigm shift.
That's just a whole different kind of thing.
I still think the way you fight with me so much you must have a crush on me. hahaha.
I can't wrap my head around you being a man. In my head you''ve always been a tall, skinny 19 year old brat of a girl with strange brown hair and high cheekbones. Annoying, too, and with an attitude that makes me want to smack the shit out of you sometimes.
Congratulations on the prostate orgasms, man. That's quite an accomplishment, especially for a 19 year old girl. ha
Look, you can spin this thing any old negative way you want. The material is there and open to interpretation, but I'm going to come back at you again with the obvious fact that most authors don't design their scenes with the goal of turning off, offending, and causing their readers to close the story and never open it again. Also, the rest of the story doesn't support Kirishima as a violent criminal rapist, and neither does it support Kurama as a rape victim who is going to forever think of Kirishima as someone who is unredeemable. They've been madly in love with each other for years, and that isn't going to change. It's yaoi. They're definitely going to weather this storm.
You're right that he said no clearly and many times. Still, both of them are temporarily insane on this night of all nights in their lives. It's fiction, and they're allowed to be, no, expected to be, nothing at all like real human beings.
Everything you said was correct given the narrative. What I'm saying is that I don't trust the narrative, and I'm saying why and giving examples of why I think there's a way to make a much more enjoyable interpretation.
That one fingering panel is HOT. You don't see that? That's fine, but just remember this: I enjoyed that drawing, you didn't. It's your loss, man. You're a man, for real? LOL No, I believe you. I just can't get used to it.
Another damned thing, youraed, see how I'm nice to you and once in a while concede some points? Would it kill you to come out of all-out-assault mode once in a while? I'm even nice to you even though I think you dislike and just want to find fault with everything I say.
Holy shit calm down, it wasn't that serious. I'm actually 23, i have black hair and brown eyes, i'm puerto rican and white. So... I didn't really remember you when i responded and while you view my response as an attack, i really don't see how. I mean, even looking back i was just responding. As far as conceding points, i concede if i feel that i'm wrong and, in this case, i was careful to agree with what i thought was right. If you look at even my 1st response, i said "to be clear, he felt pleasure physically", which is something i was agreeing with you on. In my 2nd response i said "here is why that is not QUITE right. Yes, he'd always wanted Kirishima", again, me agreeing with you on that point while also bringing more facts forward. As you can see, i did concede...? About the scene, i did find it hot, but i also acknowledge the reality that it was rape. I don't believe i said i didn't like it? If we're getting into multiple conflicts it's probably because we disagree on a lot and, judging from your responses to another topic i just saw, you're kinda bitchy in your responses. Have you considered that your attitude just attracts me into responding to you? I remember your username, not any of our past conflicts, i suggest you move on too?
That's pretty sad when I consider your repeated attacks on me on Deadlock, a manga where I was the head of the translation team, and where I conceded almost everything to you and even apologized to the people you were so adamantly defending even though they barely had any point whatsoever; where even after that you still kept on at me, speaking to me with so much derision in front of the audience of the manga I'd put so much energy into that it became personally embarrassing to me. You don't remember me? Well I sure as hell remember you.
On another manga a while back, you were so much on the attack against every single thing I said no matter what, that I told you I never read your comments so don't bother confronting me anymore. That you don't remember any of this probably means you treat everyone with the same nasty, humorless attitude you use on me. By the way, a polite concession is usually preceded by, "I see your point on this or that," or "I think you're right about such and such." It's what happens in a polite discussion where you remember that the person on the other end is a human being.
if I discuss things with someone, I usually remember them. I remember a lot of people here, and if I comment on a story, I remember every bit of it without needing you to post a bunch of quotes from it.
Your swipe at me, "This is what I'm talking about" was nothing but rudeness. As if I'm going to walk away, thinking, "golly gee, youraed chastised me so all my points must be wrong. I must strive to improve myself." LOL. What I really think is that you don't have any of your own opinions so you prey on mine or other people's, which just makes you a little bitch. Get your own opinions instead of always figuring out ways to pick mine apart.
1st, i guess i should apologize since you seem to have been hurt by me, i'm sorry.
2nd... ლ(´ڡ`ლ) god i want to be a "bitch" since i tend to not take paragraphs like that laying down, but i guess i'll fuck off since it seems to have been said because of said hurt. I will say that if i was an asshole to you, it's usually for a reason, but maybe i went too far.
Fine, i'll just leave with that apology. ╮( ̄▽ ̄)╭
He could have come from being fingered and twice from being fucked...in the yaoi world, that isn't that unusual in one session. Your comment wants to have it both ways - 'in the real world, it's not like this' and 'but in yaoi, this always means this.'
Dude feels raped. Dude said no. Dude felt pleasure. Last statement doesn't negate the first two. He was probably in shock and in a bit of pain from the initial almost-dry fingering. He seems to be completely blindsided and his dreams are getting crushed in real time. That would be a lot to take in while getting fingered and penetrated. I don't really get what your issue here is.
I mean, I fully expect the author to walk this back with some bullshit from the uke about how he was overreacting and was just ~scared of his own feelings~ or something but the sequence of events makes pretty clear sense to me.
You are all so ridiculous! Every story has these boring rape discussions at the end. You are sitting here preaching about sex, and meanwhile you're doing NOTHING about the certain fact that your entire generation is being hollowed out, being handed sterile, non-reproductive wombs just so you can get faster downloads and no dropped calls. It's incredible. Everyone here who is young is headed for either dying young of brain cancer or sterilization All of you, and yet you just sit here and let them roll out the killer-level radiation 5G. if the new 5G doesn't get you, the extremely dangerous smart meters installed on your homes will. These things have any number of ways of killing you, including exploding into flames and burning down your house, which is, sadly enough, the least dangerous of all the horrible shit these things can do to you. You're going to die young with no future generation, so why aren't you using this damned "consent" energy to get out there and get the extreme-danger levels of radiation bombarding EVERYONE from all directions stopped? You're literally living being slowly poisoned from every direction. It's inescapable. 5G is the nail in your coffins, yet "did he consent" is all you can think about. It's disgusting. You think I'm kidding? Hazardous levels of radiation comes at 1.0. You're already living under levels of 9.0 and higher. don't believe me. read up on it yourself. Just stfu about fantasy rape all the time.
Are you trolling lol
What does this manga have to do with 5G radiation or what not, I don’t get the correlation? If you’re serious then you’re being a hypocrite since this 5G is clearly affecting you to seeing how you’ve read quite the sum of manga.
Maybe because reality is too harsh and there's nothing people can do anymore to fix what will be coming soon...? So most just want to hide themself in easy fantasies and dream for the time being.
There are not only those radiations and waves, there are also the biosphere of earth that humans have fucked up, and now things are going out of control. Floodings are happening almost in the daily basis in every continent, tsunamis, typhons, hurricans, wildfires... cracks and eruption of volcanoes are waking up more and more, there are strange events that's happening, abnormal clouds... For those who are ware of those events, this is scary shit. You're right, it is easier to fight for nonsense and small, silly, matters than fighting over real dangers.
About this yaoi, tbh, this is a bit messy and confusing. Even the protagonists don't seem to really know what they are doing. About me, they're attracted to each others, and even if if was rough, it wasn't really rape. The Uke does like the Seme (he's just desperate) and later, he will be willing to have sex again with the guy.
WOW. an intelligent, informed response, and you're right. It's a relief to have some yaoi to read to escape reality.
The younger people are calling a lot of things rape, but they have no way to enforce these consent rules they're so adamant about, and no way to prosecute and imprison the people they are trying to criminalize.
Kirishima is young, extremely confused, trying to sort out his sexuality. He's been inescapably thinking about kurama for four years without any outlet. Kurama might appear to Kirishima in his present state of mind to be consenting.
kirishima also has reason to have anger mixing into his feelings at the time. Kurama is claiming to want him because to Kurama, Kirishima is a random nobody, or that's how it looks. I can forgive sincere remorse on Kirishima's part, and so can Kurama, which is what he does later in the story.
Whether or not it's rape is irrelevant because the rape passes and is overwritten by the love of the two people who were made for each other. The situation is for the two people involved to sort out.
Sometimes I think that rape is all these people think about. Myself, I don't like the subject as a topic for convrsation.
Thanks. I'm well aware of the situation in earth in many ways because I follow those topics and am curious about what will be coming as people are getting more and more weird, sick and as insects and animal are massively dying. Truthfully, there are so much more grave subjects to discuss, yet people are like they're sleeping and fight over ridiculous things. We're just fucked, and it's juts a matter of time before the collapse.
I recommand you channels on youtube like Understanding climate change, where without any dramas, the guy just show images of what's haapening. No music, no fioritures... Just the reality.
There are worse rape (if this one there is actually really rape), where the Uke gets beaten and gang banged, and humiliated by a bunch of assholes.asshole. That, is real rape to me. Not really this yaoi, where the both obviously feel desire for one another, and like you told, are just experiencing doubts and fear. Chapter 4, the Uke even goes above the sleeping Seme to have s* with him. So, speaking of rape, it's not really credible.... -_-
Thank you, ys. I'll check out that youtube. I've watched some of Deborah Tavaris' youtubes. She's very informative. The Corey Goode material about the space programs is also good to read. There's youtubes, but I prefer reading his testimony. If all he says is true, the whole world is nothing like what we think it is. woohoo.
yeah, this is such a good story, and I love the art. It's really cute, too.
It's too bad everyone's getting such a big turn-off from this chapter.
I don't like it that so many shades of gray are being placed on rape today. It's not that I don't think people have a valid point, it's just that if there's anything that trivializes what real rape victims go through it should scare everyone. People like the guy above or women raped by a stranger out of the dark have to go through not just the rape but the real possibility that at the end of the ordeal they have a good chance of being killed. That's different than someone who didn't give verbal consent. Both are bad, but they are two different things. There's got to be a better way than putting it all in one category is what I think.
You're welcome.
About Deborah Tavares, I've watched also a bit of her videos. Apparently some say she has a tendency to conspiracy theories, therefore is not very credible (or at least, not always). There are an infinite of infos on internet nowadays, one thing and its opposite, with between many other theories... so I'm always careful about what I watch/read.
Though, about the waves, studies and doctors begin to acknowledge their dangerosity on human's health; brain and behavior; especially on fetus and young childs.
They're talking about a form of autism with difficulties of learning if the kid is exposed daily for hours to screens/wifi waves... In the other hand, we've never seen so much enclosed teens/yound adults - hikikomoris - nowadays, and it's a growing phenomenon... The behavior of these latter, is pretty similar to a form of autism as well (but an adult form?).
Many threats are surrounding now our survivance as specy on this planet; we're too numerous and in the same time, the fecondity of humans is dropping (in the most technologic countries, specially)... Talking about these subjects is too difficult for majority of people, many are ignorant, many refuse to know, all feel guilty... That's why, it's hard to believe we'll live like this for another hundred years.
Hopefully, we wtill have our yaoi to give us some positive vibes :)
If I've to give my opinion on this yaoi and this chapter, I won't call it rape. And yes, you're right : in this yaoi community, people scream to rape too easely.
I'll just call the Seme... pushy. Both are attracted and are horny af; they're just confused and need time to understand themselves better.
So, then, what is rape? Rape is what you described, bu can also be committed by a personne in the family, friends... In all case, the victim is always threatened by something (the autority of the agressor, weapon...), feel deeply ashamed, and has their life in danger... All those aspects are not present here.
I don't like psycho Seme who also abuse of the lil Uke, but it's definitely not the case here. From the beginning to end, their relationship were always very sexual and intense, and the duration of their sexual activities, quite LONG lol.
What I call rape? Something like MOB FOR JACK. Damn, I hate this one.
Some will say, "But this is porn to fap! Idiot!"
I don't care!
Zaria definitely has some wild fantasies and this one is part of her first yaoi, but it's still out of place to me.
This poor Jack, cute as he is, deserves to be treated better or atleast to find a savior and lover, to give to all this some sense. But no.
Even if it's fiction, I can't bring myself (as a human being) to like something like that; to see such misfortune.
In his life, he was abused by his father, and later, used as a sex doll by his colleagues... His state of mind is like a mind-break victim to me, a drug addicted who doesn't know to discern what's right from wrong anymore... YET you have, in the comment section, so many readers who say they'll go to hell because they enjoyed this. Some even say they like the father, or that what happens now to Jack with the soldiers is still better than the father, because indeed, the poor boy is a sex addicted... WTF?!!
If you know why and how he's becoming like that, he should not be treated like this! He's a victim of abuse with all its symptoms.
There, WHERE ARE ALL THE JUSTICIERS we should find to scream scandal?! Nowhere to find!!
-_- Speaking of human logic...
thank you, translators. You're the best! I've been waiting and waiting for this forever. XO
Now, if you guys never saw this chapter till the translation came out, you missed out. Looking at just the pictures, this is the best rape scene EVER! Kirishima pushes Kurama a little too much, but Kurama is only a little reluctant, mostly cuz of what daddy thinks. Going by the pictures, it's like, "Oh my god, he put my hand on his crotch, and he has an erection! Oh my god, he's throwing me down and holding onto my hands while he fingers my ass. It feels so good, and I feel so guilty! He'd better not do anything else!" then, "oh my god! He touched me inside! My prostate is ... OH MY GOd! He's stimulating my prostate! ::convulsion::: ::ecstacy:: ::hard orgasm:: "No no, I can't let him go any further!"
"Oh, god god god! He's thrown me down on the bed (nice soft bed instead of continuuing the scene on the cold, hard floor. Ten points Kirishima) "Now he's lubing up my ass - on that alone, Kirishima is one of yaoi's greatest lovers LOL. "He's sliding it IN! It's in! it's sinking in deeper! ::eyes rolled back in head ecstactic bliss orgasm of a lifetime:: Kirishima/Kurama heartpounding guilty sex. Kurama freaks out and runs away but not before Kirishima asks him to please stay (cuz I've always loved you)
HOWEVER..... Now that there's words, the whole thing is shitty start to finish cuz Kurama hates it, never feels good, never cums, and never deepens his feelings for Kirishima. The words are like, no no no it hurts i don't want to stop it hurts i don't want to let me go it hurts stop....ad nauseum, ad infinitim with NO indication whatsoever that Kurama had even one second of anything but hating it even to the point of insanity - turn-off bigtime. The most hilariously pathetic horrible moment of the narrative is when, after all the hysterical "I hate this, get outa my life" shitty dialogue, Kurama says "I came several times." LOL! Going by the words, NO HUMAN BEING could get off three or more times that way. No way. Impossible.






this message is for Ash-The-PR. I have to make a topic because your replies are closed off. You posted a spoiler here. I want to let you know that to post a spoiler please write that it's a spoiler at the top then space down below the line before writing the contents of the spoiler. thanks
Where is this spoiler?
I don't know who you are. I sent it in a mail on mangago to ash if you're her.
Oh i just wanted the spoiler xD. But thats fine