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I think it's all right story, but there are a few major things that bother me about this. I'm in a ranting mood today sorry.
They've been chasing her for years, but there's a 6 year difference. Like you don't think about it when you're an adult, but like that's too big a difference especially since she's only been an adult for a couple of years. I may have missed how long she knew them, but it was at least before she graduated because he just got back from military service which is usually 2 years. The author should have made the age gap closer by maybe 2 to 3 years but made it creepy that they were literally chasing after a child while an adult in the past.
They also got her drunk and stripped her naked and were naked themselves. Insinuating they were going to rape her cause she mentioned a threesome with "strangers" on the internet. This could have been told differently. There was no conversation about hooking up before stripping her. This could have been told differently.
They also had no prep anal which is honestly the worst. As someone who's experienced that it's fucking awful. It is not that easy to put it in and dry anal hurts and is not pleasurable, especially your first time.
Why would he need an excuse to expel him? He escaped an island prison wouldn't that make him a wanted man?