STEP 1. you reconsult the ancient text on how to write fanfics. Here it is:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13351337/1/My-Immortal
STEP 2. If you're writing about a ship, NEVER USE FIRST PERSON!!!
STEP 3. Try not to focus on description. Instead focus on the characters and how they're character and feelings are portrayed in the story.
STEP 4. "They...... reply
