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Honestly, for the first 4 chapters I wasn't even really sure what the fuck was happening. Is it just terrible translation? It felt like jumping from thing to thing to thing with no explanation. I was wondering if pages hadn't loaded or if chapters were missing. It was jarring. And what everyone was saying just wasn't making sense, not to mention I could scarcely figure out who was talking. If it wasn't for the images I'd have been 10000% lost in what was happening.
So yea, that alone makes me say that this story is trash. I mean, absolute dog shit writing and pacing. Then you throw on what the story actually is, and yea, it's disgusting. I'm not surprised its rating is in the low 8.0s but honestly, I wouldn't be surprised to see it down in the 7.0s.
Also I need to add that the first 4 chapters and the rest of this felt like 2 different stories. Cuz he "saved" the omega in chapter one and that was clearly when they had just met, then almost immediately he had to move away and didn't see him again until college, but then in chapter 5 the author acted like they had been the best of childhood friends?????????????? Lots of shared memories, his mom is talking about the omega like she was very familiar with him, she had a box filled with letters from him, the MC says that the boy communicated with him just through these notes as if they had spent so much time together??????? That doesn't line up at all with chapter 1 or how he seems to barely recognize him at all when meeting again years later.
Idk, just such a disjointed story.
But honestly that took a lot of effort. Idky this has such a high rating or why anyone likes it. The art is subpar, which isn't a deal breaker but it certainly is when the story is so darn bland and monotoned.
I love a secret child trope but this isn't it. The child has to be a secret/hidden for a reason. In this story they are just cuz. The alpha wasn't abusive, his family treated the omega exceptionally well, the omega wasn't running away from anything, the alpha nor his family were particularly well off so he wouldn't damage his reputation, the alpha didn't have particularly big dreams, nada. And the omega doesn't site anything like that for keeping the child a secret. He literally did it just cuz.
Let me retrace. He jumps the alpha, who has helped out the omega a lot as had his entire family, in his first rut, takes advantage of him (bordering on rape but is definitely at minimum sexual assault) (no, I don't care if the author attempted to fix this GLARING issue retroactively), all because he decided upon seeing that alpha in rut "You know what, I know I should leave, but like.... I could just get pregnant. That sounds like a fantastic idea." (I am not fucking joking). Just decides to use this alpha as an unwitting sperm donor, poofs the next morning, and runs off and has this child alone.(Aka, kidnapping) STEALS the first 4 years of his life which can never be gotten back, and never plans to tell this alpha about his child at all. Also, let's not forget that the alpha's amazing family who tended to this omega whenever his father beat the shit out of him, also missed out on their grandson's life. And again,he did all of this for no particular reason. He just thought having a kid would be super happy and cheerful 24/7 and he wouldn't have to be alone. Its also obvious he didn't actually care who the sperm donor was,he just decided in that second that having a kid would be a fantastic idea and took advantage of the alpha in rut in front of him, who also had feelings for him.
That is the CORE of this story. And in the end when the alpha finds out he's just happy to have a kid, but in no way feels robbed of all those irreplaceable moments. That is definitely not how anyone would feel if they had wanted to be there and weren't able to. The sense of loss to that time and those experiences would be enormous.
Moving past the shitty core story though, this manwha just feels like it has a checklist of tropes and is just ticking them each off one after another with no excitement, build up, or fleshing out when leaves this story feeling overall, very bland and flat. It's constantly an, "And then" story. The MC moves in to a new appartment, and then discovers his first love living next door with a child, and then he sees him with a supposed lover, and then the child goes missing, and then the lover his actually just his uncle, and then they start dating, and then another alpha from the past who is rich shows up, and then the alpha is a sleeze and is trying to sleep with the omega, and then the main couple have an argument, and then there's another misunderstanding with second alpha, and then the kid cries and falls, and then all is well between the main couple, and then the omega tells the alpha that the kid is his, and then the MC is just chill with it.
It's all very bland and boring. All of these tropes can be done very very well on their own(and there are plenty of stories like that) or mixed in some way, but the way this story is done is that it gives off this vibe of just ticking off boxes.
Idk, I don't think the story is good. The omega seems to get a pass for his shitty ass behavior and personality because of the double standard that the one who takes a dick can't be the rapist/sexual assaulter, and because he was abused. The rest of the story isn't paced well, it's not fleshed out, and is just plain boring. Throw onto that the subpar artwork and it's so extremely mid that I cannot believe that it's hot a 9.0+ rating. The only thing I can think of is that people are being willfully blind towards the very problematic omega and give a thumbs up to anything so long as the seme isn't the rapist.