Other enough for the queen, I feel almost genuinely bad for her because of what her family did to her she wouldn’t have ended up like this. She is quite sneaky and a little shitty, but I don’t think she was this evil before maybe twisted because her family clearly is of her brother and her ended up so fucked up in the head but still she should get her revenge by stabbing her brother because she’s already fucked might as well take him out because he does sound like a son of a bitch
The story feels like mildly well developed. I can only see very very slim plot holes that should’ve been addressed like where are they getting all the other vegetables and all the other seasonings and stuff is it like a wagon with trade? How are they paying for that? How is everything happening like I would’ve want more information in that regard but otherwise I really really like this. It does feel like the same old same old like a better spark to it. I will say like it’s just better made. I will say, though I wish they would have turned down certain things when it comes to like. I’ll just call me my name. I’m just like everybody else and all that shit. It’s kind of weird. I never liked that if anything I don’t like that trope as much to an extent, it would’ve been fine, but to another, you have to understand who you are and be willing to accept it.
Wish I could like this, but I’m just not into exhibitionism
Like genuinely I tried so hard to read this. This was OK at the start. I could see it getting iffy and the amount of horrid plot holes like very obvious, bad writing and bad world build is insane. At first, it was pretty OK like you could see it and then it just kept getting worse and worse and worse. I made it so far so I really wanted to complete this but the minute that the king collapse that was my last fucking strong because why is the dude that technically supposed to be responsible for the kitchen not being blamed at all for this happening under his nose and being severely punished.
The first issue that literally almost broke the camels back is the king said that he had already gone to war with the priesthood whatever so why just why didn’t they take over then what could’ve happened? Nothing was explained to us why they couldn’t take over then that is a massive chunk of story that they could’ve added to explain everything better and get the story into a better track instead of just like the big bad, but nothing needs to be explained because it’s clear that their goal even from them was to take over for what reason I don’t know probably demons. It’s always that.
The second one is clearly the fucking castle is his territory and he refuses to investigate when absolutely everybody is getting hurt there as I said before not blaming the literal head chef which is his responsibility for absolutely everybody else in the kitchen because that’s usually how it works there’s always a hierarchy technically she already found evidence, but it was only of one person, but she found evidence of absolutely everybody else, but they are still there a cook, no matter how much they wanna put it in or whatever the fuck that they hold so much power they are apparently supposed to be structurally even stronger than the Kings will to tell you to fucking leave and get executed, apparently like why is the tournament still going on? Why is he even still there? Why aren’t you continuously to investigate and how the hell did they even get the drugs in there in the first place the fact that the royal family is not working is a royal family it feels like a huge plot hole that was never fucking developed because the author decided not to actually do any work when it comes to making it hard for their character and follow an actual plot that works .
This ending felt mega abrupt like a mega abrupt. The start was great, but it kept suddenly but like going down a freaking hill type of bad like there was so much plot that this could’ve been milked for and it could’ve been 300 times better I’ve seen that this author really does this often the story goes really good. The story of the start is extremely interesting and it randomly just takes a short turn into a wall and says OK we’re stopping here and it just isn’t good. I quite dislike this being the ending regardless of how many side stories it might have unless it’s like another 20 side stories that continue the story I’m not gonna like this I also feel like the translations are good enough for them being free translations they’re good, but I feel like even with the appropriate translation. This would still freaking suck. There could’ve been so much more.
Personally, I’m not gonna lie. I don’t know how they did it, but the art got better because I found the babies kind of ugly before like you cannot tell me like an actual baby baby like four or five months. Their legs are not that long they just not unless they’re in an XXL baby. I assure you those are not XXL babies. So the art got better because now is slightly more looking like toddlers because there is a thing where they look that long, but not that quickly. But it got better because they look cute as fuck now.
I came back to reread, but just like real quick how most people are disregarding the fact that there’s a high potential that they might behalf Brothers so will I because I’m saying super thorough bread immediately is like a pun on words like inbred it’s crazy but I’m just gonna imagine that maybe the father knew her but not in that way. Let’s hope also how can everybody like the movie and be like oh yeah, they’re committing incest. This one’s probably more mythological base to when it comes to like faded pears and stuff like that but biologically and genetically speaking, they wouldn’t even be close because of what they are to each other if it’s real
Didn’t see that this got hacked. I just tried this out on a whim, but I’m kind of it makes sense that they dropped it because it kind of sucks the promise and itself is good, but nothing feels cohesive most likely because they made dungeons up here even though it’s more like creatures are mutating type of situation so that itself doesn’t really make sense for their dungeons. There could be an explanation for it, but like it just doesn’t make sense and then for the bracelet, you randomly have to spend money like why would I care that you have to spend money why it’s not even a human item it’s a something from a completely different universe type of situation so it doesn’t care about your type of monetary value it might want something, but I don’t think it should be that so it makes sense why this was dropped
I’ve only read recent chapters like 1012 whatever I tried to give it a try technically I gave it my best try thinking it might get better because it has a really nice promise
But it has a lot of issues, though I can literally count them off the first one being that the main character is doll. He’s extremely doll. He has nothing that won’t to make you read about him or excite you even if you’re reading a fluff or a more soft story the character shouldn’t be this boring. He is straight up boring a character that has zero greed or zero ambition because it doesn’t feel like he has any is not good.
The second being how the characters are portrayed towards him, the interactions feel very like borderline boring the interactions feel like that because the main character is boring. He has nothing that makes you wanna read about him. It’s not like his circumstances are bad so he kinda has to step up a little bit even though he’s a boring character that has no like ambition. There’s so many stories where the character is interesting, even though the genuine story itself is not.
My third biggest problem is that the universe itself isn’t that interesting there is a lot of good that this could’ve had because it’s a good premise. We’ve never gone to like. What about people that just have good stores somebody that’s on our lower rank technically I also hate that he gets handed everything to him without trying at all like I get it’s a fluff story but even in fluffy stories like the writing feels a little bit more cohesive
Also, don’t even hit me started on the writing because it does have a story but the story he is so fucking plain because a lot of the characters I know that I’m complaining about it a lot but because the main character is so plain the story feels really plain because there is so much that is most likely going to be and is being explored, but it feels freaking boring because our character is also kind of dumb even with a dumb or boring character if they just have a little bit of curiosity and it’s shown and written properly, you will be interested. This is written so like overview of the story like the tippy top there’s no wanting to understand there’s no desire for it.
Also, when you have a fluff story, you usually need really good at art. I’m not gonna lie. This art is really subpar. Things are cute but they’re like not that cute. Let’s be for real like they don’t attract to me when you have a story that is more linear soft and is more about its relationships with other characters even if they do have like powers and you see some fights because of them you’re not concentrating on that so you need really pretty art to get this specific amount of the story across.
So overall, I would give this like out of 10 a 2.5 because it has zero effort. It just feels like it has zero effort even though it could be so much more every single chapter. I just feel like it is lacking like there’s something that is supposed to be there like I felt like I read nothing about the plot. I felt like I absorbed nothing.
Even though generally with bad stories, you can clearly see the effort that the author tries to take because first of all they love their work, but for some reason you can’t get that from this, even though it probably was and took effort like this is the second time that I’ve tried to read this like I tried so hard because it feels like it has something the premise is so good but it’s viewed so bad
FYI, this probably has grammatical issues. I am writing this very late at night and I’m very dyslexic and tired sorry.
OK, so I was the tiniest bit disappointed
Actually, just disappointed I would say I hate when male leads say those specific words I no longer want to be or need anything type of thing that he said because I’m like in real life, it makes it very serious. It’s not flattery words is a fantasy so they’re fucking true and more like a romance.
and as a character, it makes them seem as less than at one point, almost like a puppet and they stop acting like a whole being. that they were made to be when this happens, and just act like a plot device. like an accessory and I detest that,
not a valid character no desire for anything no goals just oh I love you and that’s it. I am nothing else anymore. I just hope that the story doesn’t do that because when you want love for somebody, you don’t wanna stop them from being a person otherwise this is really really good like you had tiny tiny mistakes or inconsistencies that didn’t really freaking matter. I hope this character doesn’t end up like that like a puppet. I do not like plot characters that are just there for plot and don’t actually have a character.