beta
I know it’s short, so it was obvious it was gonna fall as short on something, but sometimes I really wonder if we’re just reading the same story over and over again just by different authors… It’s not bad (personally I’m not a fan of the “losing control” kinda sex and the monstrous builds of the characters’ bodies) but still… maybe I’m just tired of stories where the time characters spend with each other is so obviously just (haha) a mean to get to the sex bit. Also, short or not, it has a few kind of like plotholes, or things that just felt useless in the “long” run? Such as the lesson on traits, like, Taegyul (I’m not sure about the name srry) was sleeping like a log during that bit, so I suppose it was just a way to explain the whole thing to us readers, and I know some people might not know about omegaverse, but it felt, as I said, useless, or at least a missed chance to get Taegyul into the topic, so that later on he could make connections in his head (like when that dude stopped them) etc. Idk, again, short or not, I expected more of this author since their other work it’s really good. Like, what’s the point of writing about something you never wrote about, just for it to be like the average thing, without actually putting some sort of spin to it? Of course, they can do whatever they like however they want, it’s their work not mine, and it’s not like my word is the gospel or smth, I just felt like getting this out there more as a general consideration (I hope this makes sense, to me it does for now but since english is not my first language and I wrote this in one go I worry I didn’t make myself clear ~////~)
It was “spin on” not “spin to” ARGHHHHHHHH I had a 50/50 chance and I missed it
It’s just… the whole reason why D approached J in the first place almost NEVER comes up, and if so it’s just to say “maybe I like him regardless” even though we literally never see (besides that notebook scene in which D wonders about J’s past) D taking notes and actually incorporating what he’s been finding out in his story, so I must say I’m not really thrilled to get to the “I thought you liked me!!” bit, ‘cause to me it’s not really going to make sense. Also the “I wanna do this” and the following “you’re so stubborn” kinda conversations between the two have started to get really boring, mainly because they’re so long and repetitive. I’m more than willing to admit that I haven’t read any further and therefore I’m sure that I’m missing the more plot heavy part of it, it’s just what I’ve been thinking so far :D it’s just that a would like a story that’s a bit more balanced from the start, so that I don’t have to “get through the boring/too smutty/rough around the edges/whatever” part to get to the more interesting and/or better written part. Overall to me this is a 6.5/10 for now
I’m on ch 35 btw!! Have to read the 36th
I’m pretty sure the entire reason mc did approach ml was for inspiration for his novel..
Yes, but my point was more about how it doesn’t really get past its “pretext phase”. As in, we know that’s the reason why mc did it, but does said reason ever, consistently have a tangible impact on the development of the story? Aside from the point where ml is gonna find out about it, not really. To me it’s more of a “told not shown” part of the story